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The second part of this posting calls you to do a thorough review of a partner's results/discussion sections. The peer review is due by April 17th. You must review the work of a student who has not had his/her work reviewed as yet. Also, you must review the work of a student who you did NOT cover in our in-class peer review.
It will help to leave a brief message below someone's original posting indicating that you plan to review their work (so while you are doing the review someone else doesn't snap up your review and leave you in trouble). I recommend leaving an original message below someone's posting that reads something along the lines of: "I will cover your peer review." Once someone leaves this posting, it will help ensure that everyone gets a review.
Please carefully follow the instructions for the peer review:
Peer-Review Discussion/Results
You should complete multiple reads of your partner’s piece (one or two reads will not cut it).
Copy and paste the posting(s) into a word document.
Number each paragraph and on a separate word document write a once sentence synopsis of each paragraph’s topic and purpose. Leave ample space between so you can write and elaborate further on each paragraph. If a paragraph seems to be going in multiple directions, note the different directions the paragraph takes and explore connections between divergent ideas.
Note key support for each paragraph Evaluate how well the support/details are implemented. How well does the paragraph establish context and evidence? Is there a need for more details to expand a point or a need for more evidence or perhaps analysis of evidence to help deliver a point?
Create a ranking system to identify which paragraphs are most effective and which ones are less effective. Following your discoveries and inferences from your above sections, underscore aspects from each paragraph that need improvement and establish criteria for what works well in paragraphs that are strong and well developed. Look at transitions between different paragraphs and explore ways to improve transitions from one paragraph to the next.
Next, read the paper once more through; identify and look for a main point of theme that guides the results/discussion. From your previous analysis, and multiple read-throughs, determine what central claim is being presented. How clearly stated is the central finding? How can it be better stated? If there are a series of important claims, how could those claims be organized under one larger umbrella claim?
Come up with at least two questions to help the writer think critically about the direction of the results/discussion sections. What do you as a reader want to know more about? Where is the piece most effective and why? Which details and part of the essay stand out as most memorable and effective and why? Where does this piece need to be improved? Be specific in your commentary of your peer’s work.
Lily Kunzie
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
April 14, 2016
Results:
In conducting a textual analysis over three legal cases in the hotel industry, I was able to discover the process of what happens to hotels, hotel staff, and a hotel’s guests in major service failures. Before conducting my own research, I believed that when a hotel had a service failure, the problem was always solved on scene with the hotel offering a failed guest a free night at their hotel or perhaps a free meal. By analyzing court cases, I was able to see that my perception of service recovery was wrong. In certain cases, hotel’s failures cannot be solved by giving gifts. Instead, I have discovered that large sums of money and or punishments are the only thing that can fix certain hotel failures.
The first case I studied was a woman who sued Embassy Suites, Hilton Worldwide, and Atrium Finance III for being sexually assaulted in her room. Cheri Marchionda was staying at an Embassy Suites in Des Moines, Iowa when a man named Christopher Edward LaPointe gained access to her hotel room, without her permission, and sexually assaulted her (Rodgers 2015). In this case, the Embassy Suites she was staying at was very much responsible for what had happened because, “… a manager, a desk clerk and a maintenance man all helped LaPointe get into the woman’s room without asking Marchionda whether he had permission to be there” (Rodgers 2015). This hotel’s failure was something I never realized was even possible. Giving a stranger access to a hotel room that does not belong to them is not only illegal but scary as well. In this analysis, I also discovered a similar case that had occurred in another Embassy Suites in North Charleston, South Carolina. Discovering that two similar sexual assaults have occurred in the same hotel chain, one year apart from each other, does not give Embassy Suites and even Hilton Worldwide a very reputable name in guest safety. These incidents drive customers away from certain hotels and can hurt a hotel’s financial status tremendously if guests are choosing hotels that appear to be more safe. An agreement has not been reached in court for what Marchionda will receive from Embassy Suites, Hilton Worldwide, and Atrium Finance III. However, LaPointe was sentenced to twenty years in prison for his actions, which should give Marchionda comfort in knowing justice was served.
The second lawsuit I analyzed was a case where a lady sued a Red Roof Inn near Washington DC over bedbugs in her guest room. Bedbugs are an extremely important issue in hotels and if a guest ever encounters them, it is extremely likely that the hotel has lost a customer for life. In this case, the woman who sued the Red Roof Inn was awarded, “a $100,000 settlement for the bites and subsequent distress” (Lucky 2015). This analysis allowed me to see what other subscribers of the blog, “Boarding Area” thought about this case and the settlement awarded. Many posters wrote that $100,000 was entirely too much money while others thought that wasn’t nearly enough. It is important to note that the Red Roof Inn is more of a value hotel rather than a luxury brand resort and that could have attributed to the hotel’s failure. Although a luxury hotel might have more money or better resources to control bedbugs, having bedbugs in a guest room at any hotel is unacceptable and can ruins guest’s vacations, hurt their health, and destroy guest loyalty due to such a large failure.
I will cover your peer review.
DeleteParagraph 1: You talk a lot about your initial perceptions of how hotels handled service failures when you should be talking about the ideas and notions present in past research and how your research expands and adds to the conversation. It seems like your research is based solely off from your personal thoughts on the matter rather than a specific gap found in previous research. You clearly found a gap, so primarily explain that in your opening paragraph to show how your textual analysis ties into and is relevant to the overall conversation and previous research.
DeleteParagraph 2: This paragraph gives solid support for the main argument being made on guest safety. I especially like how you setup the argument by presenting the incident to reader thoroughly. The analysis is also sound, but you could add a bit more to tie the idea back into your main theme.
Paragraph 3: This paragraph is a little on the shorter side, as you have analysis but you’re lacking in some actual content and support that backs up the analysis. Aside from just the money the guest earned from the lawsuit, you might want to dig into how the hotel additionally suffered by having to remove the bedbugs. You may also need to add in specific findings from the blog to justify the claims that were made from it.
Paragraph 4: Good support and analysis is prevalent in this paragraph, but only to an extent. Instead of just talking about how the hotel employees feel about their jobs and how this reflects poorly on customer service, try analyzing the hotel owners themselves. The fact that they are withholding wages from employees is their wrongdoing, and that’s why it upset the employees and caused them to file a lawsuit. You need to elaborate on this to express the idea that owners need to be fair and honest with their employees to accurately run the business and keep things in line.
Paragraph 5: This is a well-constructed paragraph, as it pulls from the collective results you obtained to clearly show the purpose of the research. You touched upon each service failure again to ensure that you made your point about it. However, I would suggest adding another paragraph after this one to tie these results back into the previous research you showed in the beginning of your paper. This would create a solid, coherent paper overall that would flow nicely throughout and end properly.
Your strongest paragraph is by far the last one, as it demonstrates your ability to collectively analyze all of your results in an effort to create a central theme around them. The weakest paragraph is Paragraph 4, as you failed to properly analyze both sides of the lawsuit. This double-sided analysis was present in your discussion, but it was nowhere to be found in this paragraph. Overall I would suggest working on analyzing the content a bit more to truly express what you’re trying to get at with each of these lawsuits.
The main claim is obviously the notion that hotels have service failures and must fix them in various ways to please guests. This claim is seen throughout the section, but I think it needs to be refined more to eliminate reader ambiguity. Try to focus more on how your research ties directly into the conversation and use that main thread to hold the entire results section together.
One question I have for you is how do these service failures ultimately affect the reputability of hotels in the long run? You might want to elaborate on this a bit, as it seems like these issues are short term ones that are just fixed with lawsuits and money.
Another question I have is how often do these service failures actually happen? I don’t know if you previously addressed this somewhere else in your paper, but I think it’s a necessary point to make as it directly relates to how successful hotels are in their customer service efforts.
The final textual analysis I conducted was on a lawsuit filled against the Hilton Las Angeles Airport. This case was different than the first two because the lawsuit was filled by the hourly employees who worked at the hotel from 2004-2011 rather than hotel guests. The Hilton Hotel agreed to pay the workers $2.5 million because they had been withholding wages from the hourly workers. One man, Juan Banales, a cook at the hotel said, “For years, we’ve felt like machines, only here to make more and more money for the owners of the Hilton LAX” (Weikel 2012). This is extremely important for hotels around the world to hear. The hospitality industry is based solely on excellent customer service and needs employees that are passionate about serving others. If hotel employees feel like they are only working to make their company more money, it is likely that they do not have a positive attitude of pure guest service. This kind of attitude can rub hotel guests the wrong way and send them to a different hotel with more customer service driven, passionate employees.
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After conducting my textual analysis, I was able to see what a few hotels are doing in the United States about extreme service failures. I have found that some issues can be resolved easily while others need legal action to ensure that guests and or employees are treated fairly. Although some service failures are inevitable, I believe that hotel’s can and should be taking action 24/7 to ensure guest and employee satisfaction. When looking at guest safety, I believe that hotels should make that their number one priority. Assaults like the one previously noted should not occur and should not be difficult to prevent. Hotel’s should implement a strict procedure about giving guest information away to strangers, and ensure that employees are trained on this matter. Steps to completely eliminate bedbugs should also be a daily routine of hotel employees. Taking the time to triple check that bedbugs are not present in a hotel can be the deciding factor between a lawsuit and a loyal, healthy customer. Finally, if a hotel’s employees are not focused on the main goal of satisfying guests and delivering excellent customer service, the hotel should be expecting guest failures. Although the guests come first in a hotel, employees are a very close second. By treating and paying their employees fairly, hotels have a much higher chance of making their guests return customers. Preventing and recovering from service failure in a hotel is not an easy task, but with a strong group of employees and excellent leaders, a hotel can be extremely effective in doing so and create loyal customers for life.
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DeleteMallory Baldwin
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhaney
ENC 1102
14 April 2016
Results and Discussion
From coding these songs using my own code, the results from the songs are listed above. All of the songs but one, Material Girl, had more positive lyrics than negative lyrics. Lady GaGa had the most positive lyrics in her songs, with Hair having 66.51% of the lyrics positive. These results also show that all of these artists have empowering messages that they deliver through their lyrics. Below I will explain my rationale for the lyrics I coded and how this relates to what scholars were saying about these artists.
Madonna had varied results from the two songs I analyzed. Her most popular song Vogue had 52.82 % positive lyrics for her song. Her lyrics and message in this song focused on getting away from all the negative parts in life and just letting go and dancing. One of her lyrics that show that is, “I know a place where you can get away, It’s called a dance floor, and here’s what it’s for” (Vogue). Her other song, Material Girl was the only song that had more negative lyrics than positive, but I believe her purpose for doing this was intentional. It was part of Madonna’s attitude to make fun of people that are all about materialistic items through her carefree persona, and this is what this song aims to do. From these two songs analyzed, it shows that Madonna lives up to her carefree life discussing to get away from the negative and making fun of the people who do care about these ideas.
The two songs I analyzed from Whitney Houston correlates to what the scholars say about Houston. When people think of empowering female artists, she is not the most conventional one, but her lyrics show other wise. When I chose these songs at first, I thought they were not going to have high percentages of positive lyrics, but they in fact do. Her song, I Will Always Love You mainly focuses on a breakup, but has many lyrics that give an empowering feel to the song including: “Bittersweet memories- that is all I’m taking with me,” (I Will Always Love You). Her other song, I’m Every Woman also contains positive lyrics towards women like, “I’m every woman, It’s all in me” (I’m Every Woman), showing girls that they can really do anything that they set their minds to. Houston’s unique cross-over music still contains positive lyrics aimed to female listeners.
The Spice Girls definitely have a since of girl power in the two songs chosen. Their most famous hit, Wannabe talks about getting to know her friends before dating. The overall song delivers the message that a female’s girl friends are the most important thing, and it trumps having a boyfriend. One of the bands less popular songs, Do It also contains an important message. The whole purpose of the song is to tell the listener to break the stereotypical rules of a girl. The lyrics, “Keep your mouth shut, keep your legs shut, Go back in your place, Blameless, shameless, damsel in disgrace” contains negative thoughts towards females, but they then go to saw to break those rules, and to be yourself. These two songs from the Spice Girls show that they in fact brought about a new wave of feminism in the 90s inspired by Madonna’s carefree attitudes.
The more modern artists, including Taylor Swift, also had songs that contained positive and negative lyrics towards women. Her most popular song, Shake It Off, had a lot of positive lyrics geared towards women. The overall message she was trying to convey through this song was to forget what ‘haters’ say about the listener and to just “Shake it off.” The other song analyzed, Mean, was an interesting song. It contained a lot of self-reassuring lyrics geared towards the listener. The song said it’s okay if you are going to be mean, because someday the listener will amount to something, and “all you’re ever going to be is mean” (Mean). It was positive to the listener if they were being bullied, but there were also lots of negative lyrics in this song geared towards the ‘bully,’ which I marked as negative. These songs somewhat relate to what scholars had to say about her. She is a positive role model to teenage girls from her songs, but these results did not show that she is not a good role model to girls, because both songs had more positive than negative lyrics.
ReplyDeleteBeyoncé was another artist whose songs I analyzed. Over 50% of the lyrics in her popular song, Single Ladies were positive lyrics geared towards women. This song is all about being okay with being single, and if the man wants the girl back he should “Put a ring on it” (Single Ladies). Her other song Flawless features a feminist speech from Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie, explaining what society teaches girls to be and how it should be changed. While it doesn’t have that high of a percentage of positive lyrics geared towards females, the overall message of the song is definitely positive. The scholars were somewhat on the fence whether Beyoncé was empowering towards females or not through feminism, and these songs show that she is.
The last artist’s songs I analyzed was Lady Gaga. Gaga had the highest percentage of positive lyrics in both of her songs. Her most popular song, Born This Way, was geared towards anyone, both male and female who felt out of place in life, from either the way they looked, their sexual orientation, and how they should know it is okay because they were born this way. Her other song, Hair, had the highest amount of positive lyrics, which was 66.515%. The whole meaning of this song is to forget about these identities that everyone says girls should be, and to be free, like our hair. The scholars say that Gaga is bringing a new wave of feminism to the 21st century, and these findings correlate to what they say. She had the highest amount of positive lyrics in her songs, and it was geared to different types of people, not just females.
Artists mentioned above all have their own unique forms of music. All of these songs were written about different things and geared to different audiences, but they all have positive lyrics geared towards women. From conducting my textual analysis, most of the negative lyrics in the songs were used to prove a point that the listener should not listen to the negative comments or stereotypes that are said about women, and to be themselves in their own way. From the scholars to the textual analysis, all of these artists make girls feel good about themselves through empowerment, girl power, and feminism.
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Delete1 The objective of this paragraph appears to be introducing your results from coding the songs, and informs the reader that artists have empowering messages in their lyrics. As far as support for this paragraph I would recommend explaining how you “code” the lyrics in further detail.
Delete2. The focus of this paragraph seems to be Madonna and her lyrics, underlying the fact that they are mostly positive. It appears to have good evidence to support your claim, maybe I would mention how her lyrics relate to feminism more.
3.The focus of this paragraph is Whitney Houstons lyrics, and how they are overall a positive influence. I feel like the support was well implemented in this paragraph.
4.The objective of this paragraph was to discuss Spice Girls lyrics, and how they are also mainly positive. You explained the spice girls lyric usage very well and used your support/evidence nicely.
5. This paragraph aims towards Taylor Swift and her lyrics, it discusses a little negative lyrics but continues the trend of mainly positive lyrics. I feel like this paragraph also used the evidence nicely however I would once again try to connect it more to feminism, and how it positively influences that specific area.
6. Paragraph is focused on Beyonce, explains her music to be positive especially in regards to feminism. I would explain a little more thoroughly at the end how Beyoncé’s songs are empowering towards females with specific examples.
7. This paragraph explains the analysis of Lady Gagas lyrics and explains that they are also, mostly positive. I think this paragraph used the evidence very well and connected it to feminism especially, I think it is a good paragraph to look at for adding to your other sections.
8.The final paragraph really highlights the fact that song lyrics are powerful and a positive influence especially regarding feminism. The last paragraph wraps together everything nicely and helps the reader to understand what you are trying to research better, good paragraph.
Main Theme: The central claim appears to be that female artist are overall empowering the feminist movement and having a positive influence on women and girls. At points in the reading it appears that maybe you are just looking at the positive or negative lyrics, try to stay focused on the feminism angle.
Questions:
1. What exactly is coding the songs and how did you do it? Maybe add a little more to how you analyzed the songs?
2. You mention what scholars think about Whitney Houston, what exactly do they think?
Stephen Tassinaro
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
14 April 2016
In my research I found a lot about the negative aspects of television and the only real noted positive effect was that it helps people to wind down, or relax. Part of my research was a survey that asked about how adults think their children watch TV and the positive and/or negative effects of this television viewing. I discovered some unexpected themes in my own research. What stood out is that many adults that took my survey believe children are picking up on a lot of random knowledge from television that is helping their conversational and social skills. The extent of this knowledge and what it consists of depends on the shows watched. This disagrees with many of the studies I previously found.
After interviewing several different family members and also some friends who have younger sibling my results have given me some interesting information, much of which supports the results of other researchers and my own assumptions. When interviewing my parents in regards to the television viewing habits of my brother and I it was interesting to hear that they felt television seems to have very little effect on either of our behaviors. My brother watches quite a bit of television but has shown no weakness in his schooling and also his social behavior is excellent, he has many friends in the neighborhood that he plays with almost every day. They did in fact notice that both my brother and I enjoyed watching television to wind down before bed and due to the shows we enjoy watching we actually knew a lot of random information that is not necessarily beneficial for school, but beneficial in social situations and continuing conversations. A fellow classmate made a similar comment about the random information his brother knows due to the large amount of television he watches is well beyond that of what my classmate knew at that age. This is interesting because I was not able to find any researchers that share this opinion, on the benefits of television and how this “random” knowledge can be quite beneficial.
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Delete1. In my research I found a lot about the negative aspects of television and the only real noted positive effect was that it helps people to wind down, or relax. Part of my research was a survey that asked about how adults think their children watch TV and the positive and/or negative effects of this television viewing. I discovered some unexpected themes in my own research. What stood out is that many adults that took my survey believe children are picking up on a lot of random knowledge from television that is helping their conversational and social skills. The extent of this knowledge and what it consists of depends on the shows watched. This disagrees with many of the studies I previously found.
Delete2. After interviewing several different family members and also some friends who have younger sibling my results have given me some interesting information, much of which supports the results of other researchers and my own assumptions. When interviewing my parents in regards to the television viewing habits of my brother and I it was interesting to hear that they felt television seems to have very little effect on either of our behaviors. My brother watches quite a bit of television but has shown no weakness in his schooling and also his social behavior is excellent, he has many friends in the neighborhood that he plays with almost every day. They did in fact notice that both my brother and I enjoyed watching television to wind down before bed and due to the shows we enjoy watching we actually knew a lot of random information that is not necessarily beneficial for school, but beneficial in social situations and continuing conversations. A fellow classmate made a similar comment about the random information his brother knows due to the large amount of television he watches is well beyond that of what my classmate knew at that age. This is interesting because I was not able to find any researchers that share this opinion, on the benefits of television and how this “random” knowledge can be quite beneficial.
Miranda Martin
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
14 April 2016
Results and Discussion:
The results of my survey and responses from my interviews show that overall there is a difference in multiple aspects of psychological well-being of individuals before and after receiving their service dog. From my study, the aspects most affected by having a service dog are anxiety and stress, however depression and self-esteem are areas that are also affected.
The aspect of psychological well-being that the majority of my survey questions were focused on was anxiety. My results coincided with the findings of scholars that anxiety in humans decreases as a result of having a service dog. On average, my participants scored a 5.5 out of 10 on their level of anxiety before receiving their service dog. After receiving their service dog, their level of anxiety dropped 3 points to 2.5 out of 10. Individually, certain individuals had an even greater drop—one participant started by rating her anxiety at an 8 before receiving their service dog and dropped to 1 after receiving her service dog. What this indicates is that service dogs have a profound positive impact on the anxiety of their owners.
During the interviews, a couple of the questions targeted anxiety. All but one person reported significant positive changes in their anxiety. One individual told me she is typically an anxious person and just after 3 months of being placed with her service dog she was able to discontinue some of her psychiatric medication that she was taking. Two different individuals noted that when they get anxious, their service dog comforts them by coming over for them to pet their dog and cuddle and even give kisses. Its the “’constant companionship”—as one interviewee said—that people have with their service dog that allows it to have a huge impact on their life, not just assisting physically but also emotionally. However, one person I interviewed said that sometimes her anxiety is increased due to the unwanted attention she received from having her service dog out with her in public. All the things she must do to take care of the dog also increase her anxiety. She states that she moves slowly with her own routine that adding in his care slows her down sometimes, but she wouldn’t have it any other way. Therefore, while having to take care of a service dog may be a slight burden for some at times, overall anxiety is decreased due to having a service dog.
The next aspect that individuals saw improvement on was their stress levels and ability to handle stressful situations. My survey concluded that on average participants rated their stress initially at a 6 out of 10, then after having their service dog their stress decreased and they rated it a 3 out of 10. Therefore, my data indicates that the individuals felt that after receiving their service dog they were better able to handle their stress and felt less upset when something unexpected occurred. Additionally, they reported improvements in being able to handle personal problems, which shows that due to having a service dog, they are less likely to become easily stressed and not be able to get through difficult situations in life.
As for the interviews, one question I asked was for my participants to describe a stressful situation they have been through and how their service dog helped them overcome their stress. They said their service dog calms them down by simply being with them, whether it’s going to the store or to the doctor to receive medical procedures, and the dog generally makes them feel happier.
ReplyDeleteDepression and self-esteem are the final aspects of psychological well-being that I focused on in my study. It is evident that many people generally struggle with some sort of anxiety and stress throughout life, however they don’t always struggle with depression and self-esteem. But, I did find improvements for many of my participants in these two areas. My survey did not directly ask about self-esteem, but it did address depression and feeling down or hopeless. On average, participants scored a 5 out of 10 for their depression before receiving their service dog and then scored a 2.25 out of 10 for their depression after receiving their service dog. So, my survey shows that the individuals noticed a decrease in feeling depressed after they received their service dog. In my interviews, I found that the service dogs are comforting towards their owner when they feel depressed. Also, one individual says she has no time to feel down, or depressed, because she has someone (her dog) to get up and do things for.
I asked one question regarding self-esteem in my interviews, asking if the participants had low or high self-esteem before receiving their service dog and if it has been affect since they received their dog. Each person I interviewed saw an increase in her self-esteem. One said that they felt defeated by the nondisabled world, however because of her service dog she is functioning well within the world as a disabled individual. Another said her self-esteem went from low to high because when she got her service dog everyone wanted to meet her dog, which boosted her self-esteem.
When looking at the results from the survey as well as the responses to the interview questions, it is clearly evident that service animals affect the psychological well-being of humans. They result in an increase in anxiety, stress, depression and self-esteem. These are all aspects that scholars have already seen improvement in, and through my study I am able to confirm that service animals do positively affect the psychological well-being of humans in these areas. As one participant said, more things seem possible for these individuals while having these service dogs to assist them daily.
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Delete1st paragraph review- The first sentence does a good job at summarizing what is going on and what you will be going over in the following paragraph's.
Delete2nd paragraph review- Maybe you could elaborate more about the conditions surrounding these service dog experiments. Also, I would take out the word “individually” or change “certain individuals” to “participants” to avoid redundancy.
3rd paragraph review- More quotations from the interviews could make this paragraph stronger. Rather than making claims on the interviewees behalf, it would sound more legitimate in their own words.
Paragraph 4 review- Maybe you could elaborate more here about daily life situations that the dogs can help us through.
Paragraph 5 reveiw- I don’t see much wrong with this paragraph. However it was the first time you mentioned that the participants were disabled so maybe you could clarify if you didn't already in other parts of the paper.
Paragraph 6 review- I think you meant to say decrease in the second sentence. Also, maybe you could continue somehow by adding something you found that isn't paralleled in the scholarly article you analyzed so that it doesn’t sound like you only found out things that we already knew.
I think you most effective paragraph is the 5th, the points were conveys clearly and smoothly. Meanwhile the 4th seems like the weakest, If you dont think you can elaborate further in it maybe it could just be inserted into one of the other paragraphs.
Your main point and sub points were clear, that service dogs can positively influence you phycological well being with anxiety/ stress and depression/self esteem being the sub groups that you focused in on.
One question I would ask is if you had thought about making a chart to visually display the improvements the participants had in their phycology.
Also, I would ask the about the difference between voluntarily getting a service dog and being prescribed one and how that would have different effects.
Kristy Henderson
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC1102
14 April 2016
Results
The survey conducted was done with the purpose to find society's general opinion towards the topic of animal testing from various perspectives such as their own original thoughts, how those might change with the statistical effectiveness of such testing, and how they would feel about in regards to situations that make the topic more personal to their own lives. The first question of the survey, “would you feel more comfortable using a drug that has been tested on a live animal or a cell culture/replication of a human organ?” was intended to get a perspective on the individuals’ own original feelings towards animal testing. The results of the first question showed that 88% of people without any background information on the subject would feel more comfortable using a drug that has been tested on a cell-culture or a live animal. Without having any background on the topic, the vast majority of the surveyed population preferred using an alternative technique to animal testing.
The second question, “how would it affect your opinion on the first question if you were told that cell cultures and organ models can be anywhere from 20% to 40% more effective, eve being 100% effective specifically in tests for toxic substances?”, some background information is introduced to inform people with some statistics on the effectiveness of each method. With this additional information now provided, the surveyed population was asked how such details would alter their opinions, if at all. Overall, 98% of the participants either remained in favor of cell culture testing, or changed their answer from animal testing to cell cultures. Only one person of the entire study chose to maintain their choice of animal testing, making up the 2% of the audience that did not become in favor of cell cultures.
In the third question, people were asked, “would you allow your pet to be used for animal testing if it could potentially benefit the rest of society?”. The results of this question showed that 100% of the surveyed population would not allow for their own pet to be tested on, even if it could benefit others. This brings to question, if so many people are not willing to allow their own pets to be tested on because of their own attachment to them, why would they allow other animals to be tested on.
The next two questions were intended to get people feeling involved in animal testing on a personal level, in a way that might affect their own lives, and therefore observe how it may affect their own opinions on it. Question four asked, “On a scale of 1-5, 1 being very uncomfortable with it and 5 being very comfortable with it, how would you feel knowing that some of your tax money is going towards animal testing?”. The results showed that 74% would feel either uncomfortable or very uncomfortable with it, 12% were either comfortable or very comfortable with it, and 22% were neutral towards the situation. While there is a greater distribution of responses in this question as compared to the previous ones, the vast majority of the surveyed population still felt uncomfortable knowing their taxes were going towards such a controversial research method.
The last question was asked in a way to get people thinking as if they were active in the research field and performing the animal tests rather than just benefiting from the results seen by the public. Question 5 asked “On a scale of 1-5, 1 being completely uncomfortable and 5 being very comfortable with it, how would you feel performing a toxicity test on a live animal yourself?”. The results showed that 90% of the surveyed population would feel either uncomfortable or very uncomfortable performing a toxicity test on a live animal themselves, 8% said they would feel either comfortable or very comfortable, and 2% felt neutral about the situation. Again, the vast majority felt uncomfortable with actually physically placing themselves in a situation where they were the ones that had to perform the experiments that scientists do on millions of animals every single day. It shows that while there is a huge dependence on animal testing in todays society, facing the situation on a personal level creates a whole new perspective on the situation.
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Once the surveys were conducted, three individuals from the surveyed population were chosen to explain their answers and why they had chosen them. The participants chosen varied between both genders, various generations, and different backgrounds.
Participant number one is a 17-year-old male. When asked whether he felt more comfortable using a drug that has been tested on an a) an animal or b) a cell culture/organ replication, he chose option b. When asked why he chose this answer over animal testing he explained that he does not like the concept of animal testing and does not think it is right to do, and that if there are other more reasonable techniques, they should be utilized. For question number two, when asked how his opinion would change when the statistics presented about animal testing effectiveness vs. cell culture/organ replications, he chose f) that his answer of cell culture would not change. His reasoning for this choice was that it is a supportive reason to be against animal testing, and therefore supports the use of alternative methods to it if such methods are that much more reliable. For question 3, “would you allow your pet to be used for animal testing if it could potentially benefit the rest of society?”, the individual answered no. When asked why the individual had chosen no, he said that he loves his pet and it is a part of the family for a reason, therefore would not feel comfortable having it tested on and risking any harm that could be inflicted in the process. When asked question 4, the participant said that they would feel neutral about having their money put towards animal testing. They explained that as long as it did not increase the amount of money that people have to pay now he would not mind for the future, however he said that he would feel very uncomfortable if he had to perform a toxicity test himself because he “would not want to be responsible for accidentally harming an animal”.
Participant number two is a 40-year-old female. For questions one and two, she chose cell culture/ replication of a human organ, and then that she would not change that answer when given the statistical effectiveness of each one, as provided in question two. When asked her reasoning for these answers is that animals should have the same right not to be tested on as humans do, and unfortunately they do not get that say because they do not have a voice. Her answer for this problem is that people need to be that voice for them, and that is the voice she is trying to have heard when choosing not to use products tested on animals, and rather ones that have been tested on alternative methods, whether more efficient or not. Participant number two then went on to say “any drugs that would normally be tested on animals should be tested on people on death row, and if we argued that is would violate their constitutional rights, well then it would also violate an animal’s rights”. When asked in question three if she would allow her pet to be used for animal testing if it could potentially benefit society, she answered no. When asked why she chose her answer for this question she explained that her dog is a part of the family, and she would not want any part of her or anyone else’s’ family to be hurt or even die of “inappropriate testing”. She went on to explain that she also answered that she would feel very uncomfortable to both paying for animal testing in her taxes and performing a testing procedure on a live animal herself because like she said before, she does not approve of violating those animals’ rights, and paying taxes therefore supports such acts. While in the current situation of the research field, it is necessary to support animal testing right now to further healthcare, if there are alternative methods, she would feel much more comfortable with her tax money going towards supporting that.
ReplyDeleteParticipant number 3 is a 70-year-old female. For question number one, this participant chose that she would feel more comfortable using a drug that has been tested on an animl, because the reasoned that it seemed more reliable to using a living creature. However, her answer changed to cell culture/ replication of a human organ in question number two once given the statistics. Without having any background knowledge, she had quickly assumed the effectiveness of one option, without really knowing the truth, as with many of people in today’s society. Once she was told in question two how much more effective the alternative method mentioned was, she immediately changed her answer. She represents the vast majority of society that does not understand the potential of implementing various alternatives to animal testing. For question three, the individual answered that she would not allow her pet to be tested on, even if it could benefit society. Her reasoning was similar to participant number two, as her dog is considered part of the family, and the guilt she would feel if any harm were to be inflicted on her would be unforgettable. In regards to question four, this participant answered that she would feel very comfortable knowing her taxes were going towards animal testing, because as long as it is not on her live animal, she supports its usage for furthering healthcare when needed. However, her answer to question number five was that she would feel very uncomfortable performing a toxicity test herself on a live animal. Her reasoning for this is that she would be too afraid that she it would become angry and hurt her, and she would also feel too poorly for the animal if it was being hurt itself. She then went on to say that, “what you do not actually see is easier to condone”.
Discussion
ReplyDeleteThe participants questioned in the case study reflected the average individuals that participated in the survey. As seen in the data collected, most people support the rights of animals, and support the implementation of alternative research methods if they are truly more effective. As participant two represented, many of those people would also feel more comfortable knowing their tax money was going towards a more appropriate approach to research. The data also showed that, while the percentage (12%) of individuals that chose they would prefer using a drug that has been tested on an animal, as asked in question one, the percentage increased down to 3% when asked who would actually be willing to perform these tests themselves, not only illustrating the burden that is placed on those entering the medical school, but proving that it is something that many people are not willing to, which hinders the amount of people passionate about healthcare research that actually enter the field. As participant number three said, it is easier to condone what is not actually seen. When effective statistics are presented to the public, in conjunction with presenting the public with personal situations such as actually carrying out experiments and placing members that they love, such as pets, in the harmful situation, all perspectives of animal testing change. If money, such as tax money and damages cause by extremist groups, were put towards creating and implementing more effective alternatives, it would provide society with an over-all better production rate, better healthcare opportunities, and a greater sense of satisfaction.
Caleb Van Beck
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
14 April 2016
Results
Before delving into the amount of father-child interactions found in each sample episode and the unique characteristics they possess, it is important to define what I classified an interaction as for clarity’s sake. The definition of a parental interaction I utilized was any distinct conversation between parents and child in which the parent is present and is either talking directly with the child or is listening to the child and is therefore invested in the conversation. One exception to the presence rule allowed any phone call between a parent and a child to be classified as an interaction. These basic guidelines governed my overall coding in a rather neat and organized way that removed any possible ambiguity from the process. Although rudimentary in form, this definition of an interaction allowed for virtually all of the data below to be collected and analyzed in the first place, which ultimately made it a very important part of the research.
The first findings from my research indicate the clear lack of presence of fathers around their children. Out of a total of 42 parent interactions recorded among the five episodes examined, only 19% involved strictly fathers. On the other hand, 40.5% of all interactions involved mothers only. An additional 40.5% of interactions included both the mother and father. This affirms the notion that mothers and fathers are more equal in their parenting roles, as they are interacting together with their children more often. However, this also clearly shows though that mothers are interacting singularly with their children twice as much as fathers are. Therefore, viewers are left with the impression that fathers have a less important role compared to mothers because they aren’t involved with their children as much. This impression directly feeds into the negative portrayal of fathers, as they obviously can’t parent properly when they are absent from their children.
This lack of fatherly presence is all the more amplified when viewing the sample episodes in detail. For instance, the show Modern Family contains three different couples with children. However, one couple is gay, which therefore creates an environment with four fathers and two mothers. Now it may seem as if the show would include twice as many father-child interactions than mother-child interactions, but it was the exact opposite case. The two mothers accounted for a total of 10 singular interactions throughout the entire sample episode, whereas the four fathers accounted for only 5. In addition, one of the fathers was only involved in joint interactions with the mother and never singularly interacted with his child. One more interesting note is the fact that the two shows Last Man Standing and The Middle involved no singular father-child interactions at all. All of these specific findings point to the obvious notion that fathers on television are just simply not involved as much with their children as mothers are. This notion is ultimately conveyed to viewers and creates a negative portrayal of fathers in which they assume an overall lesser role as parents.
Furthermore, my detailed analysis of individual fatherly interactions led me to discover the dominating stereotype of goofy and comedic fathers running throughout television shows. While it should be noted that the specific niche of shows being examined here ultimately centered on comedy, it seemed as though fathers were the main suppliers of jokes, comedic jabs, goofy behavior, etc. in all of their interactions with their children. Looking at jokes in specific, it was clearly noted that fathers consistently joked with their wives or children directly while in the presence of their children across every TV show except Modern Family. Certain jokes involved slightly cynical insults towards wives, such as the one in Black-ish when the father tells the wife “You disgust me”. Another situation from Last Man Standing involved the father passively joking about women in general while directly in front of his wife, three daughters, and grandson. Several other sarcastic remarks were made directly towards children and about children in the shows The Goldbergs, The Middle, and Black-ish. This collectively proves that fathers on television take the main role of jokester in their families and a secondary role as a father. It also shows viewers that it’s rather normal for fathers to insult, belittle, or mess with other family members, as it’s depicted as funny and amusing. This ultimately sends the wrong message to viewers that fathers are teasing, mischievous individuals who aren’t as serious and caring of parents as their feminine counterparts.
ReplyDeleteAdditional noting of these specific interactions compounds onto the notion of lackadaisical fathering by revealing the long-seen stereotypical behavior of the goofy, foolish father. These situations were mostly noted in the three shows Modern Family, The Goldbergs, and Black-ish. Modern Family included two fathers acting rather silly and enthusiastic in front of their children before they left for the movies. One appeared later on in front of his children while he was high on marijuana. This goofy, irrational behavior all occurred while the mother was properly parenting and disciplining the children. In the show The Goldbergs, the father formulated a goofy, inconsiderate plan to force his daughter into staying home for college. He continued the weird behavior throughout the episode until he finally patched things up with his daughter in the end. Lastly, the father in Black-ish showed goofy behavior by impersonating the President in a phone call to his son. He did this while in the presence of his other children, both of whom were laughing with him throughout. All of these specific scenarios illustrate the comedic, goofy side of fathers on television, thus giving them the appearance of immature teenagers that play with their children more so than parent them. Although certain cases were seen in which fathers actually parented their children in some way, they were surrounded by and effectively drowned out by the fathers’ comedic behavior most of the time.
One more interesting finding to note was the actual subjects that fatherly interactions revolved around. It was rather obvious in viewing each TV show that one main situation was present throughout each sample episode. Whether it was issues with a son’s girlfriend in The Middle, arranging a daughter’s college plans in The Goldbergs, or discussing potential caregivers in Black-ish, a clear situation always presented itself. All other fatherly interactions outside of these situations usually involved a random joke or conversation that was intended for comedic effect. This data further validates the very nature of the situation comedy, as each episode is grounded upon a clearly defined situation from which jokes and other comedic undertakings branch from. This is crucial to note within the context of this research, as it duly explains some of the random father-child interactions peppered throughout each episode as just mere comedic fillers.
Discussion
ReplyDeleteAll in all, the televised portrayal of fatherhood in situation comedies has reduced to a shadow of its former self. While fatherly teaching and parenting moments present themselves throughout the course of shows, they are usually shoved between several one-liner jokes and goofy behavior in an effort to make viewers laugh. As previously noted, though, the true nature of the situation comedy is that it contains comedic situations and behaviors, especially ones involving fathers. However, in accordance with Kelly’s stance, the comedic elements do little to counter the overall negative portrayals of fathers, which is why they can still be very influential to viewers. My research shows clear agreement with the past research of Brown, Pehlke et al., and others on the notion that fathers are still being portrayed as goofy, immature individuals who can’t manage their children properly. The sheer numbers alone show that mother-child interactions doubled father-child interactions in just the small sample of episodes used. On top of that, some fathers were nothing but comedic in all of their interactions with their children. This kind of foolish behavior only showcases to viewers that fathers aren’t proper, responsible, and serious parents like mothers are. All of this points directly to the troubling idea that fathers are being misrepresented on television.
Within the modern, technologically-advanced society we live in today the television is massive part of our lives. The newest generation of children already have no knowledge of a world without it. Thus, as influential as television is with much of the content it shows us, we must be careful in what that content is really saying to us as viewers. In the case of the portrayal of fatherhood in situation comedies, it is now clear that the content being fed to viewers contradicts the actual notions of real fatherhood. This difficult truth may lead viewers to alter their mindsets and views on fatherhood altogether, which in turn may create unhealthy and damaging parenting techniques similar to the ones shown on television. That is why further research still needs to be done on this vital issue to properly see the extent to which these negative fatherly portrayals affect viewers and how those effects can carry over into real fatherhood. When this is known we can truly assess the damaging effects of negative father portrayals on viewers and we will be able to adjust television programs to display fathers in more positive and realistic ways. This research brings us one step closer towards addressing the ambiguity behind the televised portrayals of fathers and how they affect society.
Kendall Minning
ReplyDeleteJoseph Longhany
ENC 1102
14 April 2016
Results:
From my research, I found that an overwhelming amount of people responded positively to social media when trying to reach their fitness goals. I must note that the people surveyed were all people already on track with fitness, or those who are interested in fitness/exercise. Those who were interviewed during the focus group were a random bunch of students with some knowledge of social media. Although each person had their own personal preference as to which type of social media they liked best, there was no denying the influence these sites have on motivation. 47% of people surveyed said that they felt motivated simply by looking at pictures of fit people on the social media platform of their choosing. This shows that people pursuing a goal are directly influenced by the social media they come in contact with.
There was a trend in my results that showed people felt that Instagram was more effective at “showing” the motivation. 52% of the people surveyed claimed that Instagram provided them the most visual motivation. In the focus group, the majority of the students agreed that it was easy to scroll through the feed and see pictures that make them want to work out. This was opposite from Facebook where the focus group students agreed that having to click into albums on Facebook didn't make them any more motivated. They didn't care enough to go through the trouble. This inadvertently shows that people are motivated by convenience.
While Instagram was better at “showing” motivation, the majority of people responded that Facebook allowed them to get feedback on their progress. 30% of people said that they receive more positive feedback on Facebook than anywhere else when they are sharing their fitness progress. It must be noted that 40% of people surveyed said that they did not share fitness progress on any type of social media. This shows people are encouraged through connection. It is so effortless to type out a positive comment on someone’s post and encourage them.
Contrary to my belief, the results from blogs were not positive. Only one person in the focus group said that they follow any health and fitness blogs. This shows that although scholars believe that blogs are an integral part of fitness, today’s youth doesn't share the same ideals. From the prior data presented, it is clear that Facebook and Instagram top the charts
Each type of social media allows the user to express themselves in a different way. During the focus group, I asked some questions about Twitter, as it was overlooked by many in the survey. Out of the 4 people in the focus group, 3 said that Twitter was not as effective at motivating them as Instagram or Facebook. Their claim was that many people use Twitter to post funny things and because of that, people are dissuaded from uploading pictures of themselves. “You’re more likely to crave McDonalds after being on Twitter than you are craving to go to the gym” (Appendix B).
From the scholars and journals to the survey and focus group results, the outcome is unanimous that social media helps to motivate people to reach their fitness goals.
I'll cover your peer review!
DeleteParagraph One: This paragraph is a clear introduction to your results section. Through this paragraph, it is clear to see that you studied how social media effects fitness goals. I think you could explain a little more why it is important to your research that 47% of people feel motivated.
DeleteParagraph Two: This paragraph shows a trend in preferring Instagram motivation over other types of social media. I like how it is clear to see the results of your study by including percentages and comparing and contrasting the different types of social media. To make this paragraph stronger, I think you could elaborate on the last sentence about convenience. *Are people only motivated by Instagram because of its convenience or are there other reasons as well?*
Paragraph Three: I think you have room to really make connections to your overall paper in this paragraph. I think you could explain why you think 30% of people receive more positive feedback on Facebook and why you think the percentage of people not posting is 40% instead of 80% or 10%.
Paragraph Four: This paragraph addresses the lack of positive results from blogs. I think you could explain why you think todays youth isn’t attracted to blogs and why Instagram is more beneficial to them. You did a really nice job of connecting your results back to scholarly studies which makes your argument that much stronger.
Paragraph Five: In this paragraph, the results involving Twitter is displayed. I think it is interesting that there wasn’t much positivity in regards to using Twitter for motivation. *Why do you think Twitter makes you crave McDonalds rather than going to the gym? And why is this important to your study?* The quote you include is a spot I think you could add a little more of your own analysis to strengthen your argument.
Paragraph Six: This is a concluding sentence that could be added to in order to tie all of your findings together.
I think paragraph two is the strongest paragraph because it has the most details about your study and it is clear to see the results you found. I think paragraph six is the weakest only because there is a lot of room to expand on the conclusion, add more details, and tie the results together.
The main claim is that social media affects the way people set and achieve fitness goals. It was easy for me identify what the results section was about but if I read the entire essay, I am sure it would be even more clear.
Ayesha Razack
ReplyDeleteJoseph Longhany
ENC 1102
14 April, 2016
In the data I noticed that the majority of participants either had or knew someone who has a mental disorder. To my surprise, half of the people who said they had association with a disorder also said that said person is receiving treatment. Which is really great to see, because I did not believe that to be the case.
I found that of the people who took my survey, most did not appear to be discriminatory towards people with a mental illness. The majority seemed very understanding of the conditions as well as the constraints when it comes to poor mental health.
However when it came to whether or not they would want to befriend someone with schizophrenia, the results varied. About a quarter of participants said they would not, however half were not sure.
After asking them this, I had them check off characteristics they associate with schizophrenia, from a list provided. (See Appendix A to see all survey questions). I observed that less people would check off “Successful” and “Happy” versus characteristics listed like “Dangerous” and “Violent.” Schizophrenia has a lot of misconceptions, as well as other disorders. I used `schizophrenia because it is a more widely known disorder. I was happy to see that the majority of characteristics checked off were actual conditions of schizophrenia, like “Unpredictable” and “Delusional.”
People feel like they need to treat those with an illness differently. A participant made the following statement: “Sometimes they just need a little more care to help them get through things. It's not that I view them as any lesser, it’s just that sometimes in certain situations, they need to be seen as someone who needs help, in order to be helped.”
It was commonly noted that people felt like they had to be more cautious and on their toes around people with a mental illness. “I feel as though I am more careful about my words when I know someone has a mental disorder. Sometimes I feel as if I should look after them more and censor myself in sad or harsh things I might say in regular conversations.”
I noticed that people felt that it can be hard to relate to those with mental illnesses, versus to people who are more cognitively normal. They believed that those with disorders are simply different. “Some mental disorders cause people to behave differently (not necessarily to behave wrongly), and to be seen as slightly different (again, not seen as bad).”
I found that people were less discriminatory towards the mentally ill than I initially expected. However, people may not be entirely honest about any negative feelings they could have when they have to physically fill out a survey regarding it. For example, someone may view someone with a mental disorder negatively and be judgmental towards the disordered’s behavior, however, when asked about (even anonymously) there is a chance they will not willingly admit those negative views because of a mental guilt.
Samara Halperin
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
14 April 2016
Results:
From conducting my research, I was able to compare the Facebook pages of Coca-Cola vs. Pepsi and Blaze Pizza UCF vs. Pie Five Pizza Orlando. I have learned that overall Coca-Cola is doing a more effective job with their Facebook page and managing their social media than Pepsi. Coca-Cola has 97,248,296 followers while Pepsi has 35,059,722 followers. Coca-Cola’s average Facebook post receives between 4K and 10K likes, while Pepsi’s average Facebook post receives between 60-200 likes. Coca-Cola’s feedback was a lot about their authenticity and how long it has been in people’s lives. People posted pictures with bottles that were decades old and a lot of the posts also had to do with the personalized Coke bottles. Customers loved seeing their name or a word that applied to them or a friend/loved one of their bottle and made sure to post it on their Facebook page along with positive feedback. Almost all of Pepsi’s customer feedback posts were a complaint of some sort. Many posts complained about a defective can, expired drink, or wondering why Pepsi changed something about a product because they liked it better previously. The visitor posts on the two Facebook pages were drastically different, and unless Coca-Cola has a secret way of hiding any negative posts, they are doing much better in the customer satisfaction portion of their company and how it is portrayed on social media. Coca-Cola takes the family approach in all of their posts hoping to relate to all age groups. By this I mean that they make posts to appeal to every type of person. They have posts about falling in love, to super heroes, to equality, there is something to spark any type of person’s interest. Pepsi, on the other hand, tends to appeal more to the college demographic with posts about partnering with Urban Outfitters, going out with friends, and crazy spring break activities.
When comparing local businesses, Pie Five Pizza Orlando and Blaze Pizza UCF, I was able to see if the same tactics were useful in the most successful social media pages. Pie Five Pizza Orlando has 1,377 followers and Blaze Pizza UCF has 236 followers. Pie Five posts about popular things like referencing the current presidential race or local Orlando attractions like Disney World things going on in addition to information about items on their menu and things going on at their establishment. The only posts Blaze has made are a couple of pictures uploaded to make their page more attractive. Pie Five received between 0-5 likes on each of their posts, and Blaze received between 1-3 likes per post. From these results I have learned that most active local business social media pages receive more followers, but do not receive much more interaction on their posts. Both businesses receive only positive ratings and feedback from customers on their Facebook pages. Although Pie Five has more followers on Facebook, neither of the businesses have a lot of customer interaction taking place.
I'll do your peer review!
DeletePeer Review
DeleteParagraph One: The purpose of this paragraph explains the comparison she author made on the Facebook pages of Coke and Pepsi, concluding that Coke is doing better than Pepsi with their social media.
• Key Support: The support for this paragraph is good. It has numerical data showing the evidence from her research. I would include examples of some statuses or pictures the companies uploaded, and comments users make towards these posts.
Paragraph Two: The purpose of this paragraph compares Pie Five and Blaze Pizza’s Facebook pages concluding that the more interaction on the page, the more followers the page will receive.
• Key Support: This paragraph is similar to the first one. It has numerical data, but I would add actual examples of posts, and then explain how this helps/ hurts the company.
Paragraph that is most effective:
• I believe that the first paragraph is more effective than the second one. You go into a lot of detail in the first paragraph about how these two companies target to the different audiences. You also explain how this data shows why Coke is doing better than Pepsi. I think you could split these paragraphs up and go into more detail providing examples from each company, then make another paragraph going into more detail to say why Coke is doing better than Pepsi. With the second paragraph, I know it is more difficult to do this with local companies, but I think you should show more examples of posts they made, to explain why Pi Five Pizza is doing better than Blaze.
Main Claim:
• From the results and discussion section, I believe the main claim is that if these companies post more things geared towards their target audience, the company will do better.
Questions:
• What information can you provide to show what kinds of posts these companies make?
• How can you make this section of your paper longer?
Jadia Bashir
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
4-13-16
Results:
The overall results of my survey show positive correlations between makeup usage and issues with confidence and self-esteem. To establish a basis for specific questions about the psychological effects of wearing makeup, I asked standardized questions. Through these introductory questions, my results found that women wear makeup an average of four days a week, with the minimum number of days being at least one. This data serves to credit the idea that the majority of women do wear makeup, and that the randomization of women I attempted to survey all confessed to at least wearing it once a week. To further my research, I proposed a question about the types of makeup women wear. The results from the list showed that there is a variation in the specific types of makeup women wear, with mascara being the type worn the most. Other products, such as foundation and eyeliner, had a generally high usage number as well.
After the basic questions were addressed, the survey moved into a series of multiple choice questions pertaining to how the user feels with their makeup on, and were geared toward a correlation with psychological effects. One particularly evident result from these questions was an overall agreement with the statement “when I’m wearing makeup, I feel confident.” Not a single participant disagreed with this statement, displaying a basic agreement that these psychological effects occur, but not yet hinting at negativity. In contrast, there was a disagreement between participants and the statement “without my makeup on I feel bare/not my usual self,” with the majority of the participants selecting “strongly disagree.”
The psychological analysis of makeup was furthered in questions about self-consciousness and anxiety. Overall the participants seem to agree that without their makeup, they are more self-conscious and anxious. The stresses of being bare-faced and on display seem to bring out these negative psychological effects, and impact at least 50% of the UCF population surveyed. Participants are also more likely to socialize and interact with others when they are wearing makeup, versus the times they go out with it off, furthering the idea that makeup produces a substantial amount of confidence in young women.
Some contradicting data conveys that women don’t feel judged by others when they choose against wearing makeup, and wouldn’t worry about the criticism of others pertaining to their makeup use in general. Zero percent of participants feel that wearing makeup is a burden for them, and rather 56% of them feel that the act of wearing makeup is a positive experience. These women also claim that they do not wear makeup to please others, with 89% wearing it to satisfy only themselves.
The final results gathered from my survey were based on locations women choose to wear their makeup. The highest ranked locations these women would wear makeup were to work, and to a job interview, with a 100% agreement between all participants. On the other hand, 11% of women would apply makeup to go to the gym, and 33% to go to the beach. A significant number of women would also wear makeup to go to a party or a fancy restaurant.
Discussion:
ReplyDeleteAfter reviewing the results of my survey, it is evident that women feel more confident with their makeup on, and negative psychological effects ensue when regular makeup users aren’t wearing their makeup. Anxiety and self-consciousness both play a role in the negative health of women when their makeup comes off, and helps convey the raw truth of makeup we don’t want to admit. Some of my data did go against my hypothesis, such as the idea that women wear their makeup to please other people, or that they feel ostracized when they aren’t wearing it. This contradiction between ideas in the data may be due to the subconscious, and not immediate, affects of makeup. Although we may not believe we wear makeup to please other people, the happiness we receive from compliments about our appearance leads us to wearing it more often. The fact that 100% of participants said that they would apply their makeup to go to a job interview or to work reveals a hidden aspect of todays workforce. Women feel the need to look pretty to receive a job, and to become successful at it, leading women to wear makeup on an everyday basis. Another hard truth discovered in this survey is that women would apply makeup to go to the gym and the beach, where they will likely sweat it off and ruin it all. This aspect of makeup usage may be due to the fact that women feel more like their usual selves when they wear their makeup, so everyday events like going to the gym seem no different to them than going to a party or to a nice dinner. Overall, the usage of makeup comes with many positive effects, such as confidence and beauty, but also many negative ones, usually occurring on the psychological level. Understanding the way makeup affects women mentally and not just physically helps us to use makeup for better purposes, and resist anxiety and self-consciousness altogether.
I will do your peer review :)
DeleteParagraph 1: This is a great opening paragraph giving an overview of your results from the survey. Only thing I would try to change is that in the beginning you repeat the word “Questions” a lot. I would see if there is some way to prevent the redundancy, but otherwise a great introduction.
DeleteParagraph 2: I like how you smoothly moved into the psychological effects and focused on confidence and how girls feel while wearing makeup. However, you may want to clarify the last sentence and how it correlates to self-confidence.
Paragraph 3: This is a nice paragraph summarizing your results in relation to self-consciousness. To make it a stronger paragraph I would elaborate more on how it affects anxiety as well from your findings.
Paragraph 4: This paragraph is about the contradiction that you found about how people feel about wearing makeup. You may want to add a better transition into this paragraph. But I love how you included contradicting data and statistics to show that people do have different opinions on wearing makeup and how wearing makeup makes them feel.
Paragraph 5: This paragraph summarizes the results from where people choose to wear makeup. I like how you included the places where participants agreed 100% that they would wear makeup as well as the places that people voted the least on to where they would wear makeup.
Paragraph 6: This paragraph summarized all of your results and what they meant. Through your study you have proven that anxiety and self-consciousness both play a role in negatively affecting makeup wearers. If I were you, I would try to break up this paragraph into at least 2, if not 3 different paragraphs so it flows smoother. But, I like how you included the statements that you thought people would agree with, but they disagreed.
Most effective: Your most effective paragraph is your 6th paragraph—the discussion. You tied everything together nicely to conclude your results. As I previously stated, the only thing you might want to change is making it into multiple paragraphs rather than 1 big one.
Least effective: Your least effective paragraph would probably be your 3rd paragraph only because you could include how makeup affects both self-consciousness and anxiety more. I think if you talked more about anxiety then it would be a solid paragraph.
Main point: The central claim being presented here is that wearing makeup has positive and negative effects—specifically negative psychological effects on self-consciousness and anxiety. You mainly focused on makeup usage due to self-consciousness but you also included the positive aspects and how wearing makeup is not a burden for individuals.
2 questions:
1. My first question for you is how do your results relate to the findings of scholars? You don’t mention scholarly studies or statistics other than your own, and I think if you did it would help to clarify your findings.
2. Another question I had is what questions did you have in your survey that link wearing makeup to anxiety? If you include these questions and the results then you would be able to talk more about anxiety in relation to why we wear makeup.
Nick Cassara
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
4 April 2016
The results that I obtained from my surveys and interviews showed that popular social networking sites do in fact have an impact on intimate relationships. After analyzing my collected data, I was able to conclude that social media has a negative effect on intimate relationships.
The results of my survey showed that 8 out of the 10 people surveyed said that social networking sites have a negative effect on their relationship. All of the people surveyed are currently in an intimate relationship which concludes that social media as a whole has an overall negative impact.
While conducting my interviews, 3 main factors were assessed, jealousy, trust and honesty. I interviewed 2 individuals who had completed the survey, one who concluded that social networking sites have a positive effect on their relationship, and another who concluded the opposite. I started by interviewing the person who responded negatively to my survey, I asked them personal questions pertaining to the way that they view themselves in a relationship and how they interact with their partner. I wanted to obtain some background information about their relationship outside of social media so that I could isolate the role that social media plays. After my initial questioning, I concluded that the subject was an average partner to their significant other in the sense that they aren't too jealous, they don't lie to their partner, and they trust their partner. I then began to ask questions pertaining to social media, which is where things got interesting, it seemed as though social media amplified all 3 of the factors mentioned in a negative way. The person I interviewed was a girl, and she found that her jealousy was increased because she was unaware of the other girls on social networking sites intentions towards her boyfriend and that when girls would like his photos, it was like them stating that they find him attractive, which would cause her to feel insecure. Trust and honesty issues also arose because her boyfriend wouldn't disclose if he interacted with another girl on social media until she asked. My second interview took place with a boy who had completed my survey and responded positively. I asked him the same preliminary questions that I asked the girl who I had interviewed before him and just like her, he seemed to be the exact same way in his relationship, not too jealous, trusting and honest. The interesting part about this, is that when I began to ask him questions pertaining to his relationship and the role that social media played, he reconfirmed that it has had a positive impact on his relationship. He said that his sentiments about jealousy, trust and honesty extended to the realm of social media too and that as long as his girlfriend wasn't blatantly cheating or disrespecting their relationship on social networking sites, then it is doing their relationship no harm. He also added that he likes social networking sites, because it is a way for him to show off his girlfriend to everyone in a manner that is socially acceptable and it gives them things to talk about.
After looking at the results of my survey, it is obvious that as a whole, social networking sites have a negative effect on the majority of intimate relationships. My interviews were helpful in adding background knowledge into why social media gives users in committed relationships such bad experiences.
This piece seems to be combined all into on paragraph with a brief intro and conclusion. I will address it as one paragraph so that the peer review makes sense.
DeleteParagraph 1) This paragraph discussed who the target of the interview was, which was people in intimate relationships, and in general their responses where that social media has a negative effect on their relationship. It is clearly stated how these individuals who took this survey came to this consensus and also both sides of the argument are noted, positive and negative effects. I feel this is an effective paragraph showing both sides of the argument but also does a good job of showing that the majority of people are on the negative side of the argument.
Overall the main theme is that social media sites have a negative effect on relationships due to the trust and jealousy issues that they are prone to creating.
My two questions:
Can you split this into two paragraphs to make the positive versus negative effects more clear?
Can you go more in depth to what exactly you questioned to come to your conclusions and why you questioned these things?
Aksel Knudsen
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
14 April 2016
Discussion
In analyzing the data pertaining to extra-terrestrials, you realize a split between the search for intelligent life (SETI) and the search for any other life such as extremophiles, microbes, fungi or anything that is not conscious enough to create a communicating civilization. Despite the validity of the SETI, it is kinda skipping a step in its reasoning. Maybe we should wait to find out if any life exists before putting too much effort into intelligent life. But with the tantalizing mystery of such beings existing the our vast universe, you can’t blame us for wanting a head start.
When it comes to searching for intelligent life, there is a whole lot of speculation. Much of the research is rooted in statistical analysis of many things that may or may not be true. In many instances you need to wait for the search of general life to catch up before we can continue on with SETI. For example, all the tinkering that goes on with the Drake Equation is good fun but when it comes down to it, we can only legitimately guess at one or two of its variables. Some of which variables may not even have numerical values that can be placed to them, such as “the fraction of intelligent civilizations that developed communicative civilizations.”, for all we know, civilization or even communication itself could be a fluke in the grand scheme of universal life development. Also, the technology we currently posses doesn’t help us enough to properly search for intelligent communicating civilizations. We have been scanning the skies for radio signals for almost 50 years now without much luck but thats definitely has more to do with our lack of scope rather than a lack of what may be out there. The future is obviously optimistic with regards to technology but at the moment it’s like using tweezers to find needles in a never ending haystack.
On the other hand, much more field research and physical evidence has been dug up in the general field of astrobiology or the search for any kind of life. Ive mentioned how our own solar system has multiple, very promising signs of life and we have the ability to physically explore some of these options in the coming years. Some of which are already being planned out by NASA.
Toby Dieckman
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
14 April 2016
To answer the question “To what extent and how does a social media environment impact or influence romantic relationships today?” I concluded the best method to obtain a reliable answer would be to conduct a survey. I figured the best environment for the survey would be a social network itself, so I posted a survey of 20 questions on Facebook for my UCF peers and friends to participate in. I stated in the description of the survey that you must be in a romantic relationship, and that your significant other must also have a social media page on Facebook. The survey was created with four factors in mind, all of which I believe (based on the scholarly articles I analyzed) to be essential factors and influences that social media can have on a romantic relationship. The four factors were forming relationships, relationship maintenance, family support, and removing barriers. There were 5 questions in my survey devoted to each category, and every question asked for a numerical ranking response between one and five. One representing a not very much influence at all on the relationship, to five representing very influential to the relationship. The participants were also allowed to answer “NA” if they believed social media did not influence that factor of their relationship in any way. 16 people participated in my survey. I figured that by conducting my survey in this way, I would receive a more concise understanding of the greatest influences social media can have on a relationship. The results of survey were as follows...
FORMING RELATIONSHIPS: AVG-3.0625 “NA” Total- 2
MAINTAINING RELATIONSHIPS: AVG-2.3750 “NA” Total- 4
FAMILY SUPPORT: AVG- 3.1875 “NA” Total- 0
REMOVING BARRIERS: AVG: 2.000 “NA” Total- 6
The data results from my survey show that family support appears to be the biggest factor of a relationship impacted by social media, with forming relationships as a close second. Maintaining relationships is almost right in the middle, with four people replying that social media has not impact whatsoever on relationship maintenance. Also notice that the removing barriers section scored noticeably lower than the other factors, with the largest amount of people (six) replying that social media has no influence on removing relationship barriers at all.
Now that I had collected this data, I was closer to finding the answer to my question, however I still did not have as much information as I wanted. Using the survey, I concluded that the two main factors influenced by social media were family support, and forming relationships. I used this data to frame questions for an interview, and conducted an interview over Facebook with two participants from my survey, one male and one female.
ReplyDeleteThe first person I interviewed is named Seth, from St. George, Utah. He has been in a relationship for over a year and uses social media almost every day. To Seth, social media played a very influential role in forming his relationship, he said, “Facebook is literally the reason I started talking to Annie. She was in my first period class, and we talked a little but never anything serious. Eventually she added me on Facebook and I slid in the DM’s”. Seth used a little bit of slang at the end, sliding in the DM’s means to directly message someone on social media in order to start talking to them. The fact that a slang has been created for this represents just how important social media is to forming a relationship. I also talked to Seth about how his family is involved with is relationship, in relation to social media. He replied, “Without Facebook I don’t even think my Aunt would know I have a girlfriend, or a lot of my extended family for that matter. As far as close family goes, I’m not sure social media has a great influence but it’s definitely great for grandpas and grandmas etc.”
The next person I interviewed is named Isabelle, and she is from Winston Salem, North Carolina. She has been in a relationship for a couple weeks, and also uses social media daily. When I asked her how important and influential social media was to her for forming relationships, her answer was a bit different than Seth’s. She said, “I think social media has given an excuse for all these boys to find an easier way to start talking to girls, I have had random guys try to message me on twitter and its never flattering or turned into any sort of relationship. I think it’s better to try to talk to people in real life, I think most people prefer it that way.” To Isabelle, social media doesn’t play a great role in forming a relationship, however to Seth it’s a huge. Either way, both have been involved in messaging over social media that was aimed towards a relationship, so the influence is undeniably there. Next, I asked Isabelle how important family support over social media is, and if it has had any influence on her relationship. She said, “I definitely have to watch Grant’s page to see if he posts anything bad. My entire family follows him, including my grandparents. However, I don’t really think I search for support or anything from my family online, but it is nice to let my parents see pictures of us together and know were not out doing something bad or whatever.”
Both Isabelle and Seth had pretty similar answers regarding family support, they mainly differed in their replies regarding forming relationships. I then asked them what factor they believed had the most influence on their relationship, regarding social media. The answers were so close it was surprising. Seth replied, “I think the constant ability to watch over what your girlfriend is doing over social media can be kinda detrimental at times, a lot of problems have spawned from me overreacting to stuff she posts on social media. Stuff that wouldn’t have bothered me otherwise.” While Isabelle answered, “Sometimes I can overthink things that Grant posts, or I’ll find myself looking through his likes on Instagram and getting mad over it. I can’t imagine what it would be like if social media existed and I couldn’t check up on what Grant is doing when he’s not with me…” According to these replies, it appears that I missed a vital influence of social media, the ability to constantly watch and interact with a significant other.
Intro: Your introduction was very well put together, and you explained the process very clearly of what you wanted. You might want to include what your five questions were though, whether you put them in the article itself, or maybe in an appendix.
DeleteWhen you talked about your interview with Seth, I guess I was wondering why you told so much information about him. What was the significance of telling the reader where he is from? The answers you got from him were very good though, and I know that your readers will be able to relate to his answers as well.
Same question for Isabelle, why are you mentioning where she is from? Isabelle had some very good points as well, and once again, I think her answers were very relatable.
The last paragraph was very good because it kind of brought up a whole new idea of how social media can actually lead to a "stalker" sort of personality or trait in someone. I think if you could, you might want to ellaborate on that.
The research as a whole was very good, and very well stated. It wasn't confusing and you seemed to get your answers.
Tricia Garmager
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
14 April 2016
Results
I conducted a focus group in order to gather opinions and information about how the arts have affected students’ lives. My focus group consisted of 3 students involved in the Glee club here at UCF, and 3 students involved in the theatre department. I picked these two groups because the Glee club shows the semi-serious arts training, compared to the theatre department whose training is extensive. Along with these reasons, many students in Glee didn’t have a background education in the arts, giving me different types and resources on how an arts education can benefit students, no matter the age. My participants were chosen based on their willingness to participate in the study. The criteria for the study was based on whether a student had an arts education in the past or whether they are just beginning an arts education, and how much it has affected them.
In my focus group, I asked questions regarding grades, awards/honors, experiences, motivation, and organizational skills. These questions were important because due to other studies done by researchers, those who are involved in the arts have excelled academics, are more motivated, and tend to have good organizational skills.
I first talked to those who are involved in Glee, and had not had much arts education in the life thus far. I first questioned them on their time management and work ethic. Two out of the three students told me that they would often time turn in assignments late in high school, and missed class many times throughout the school year. The third told me she had a good work ethic, and was pretty organized, but found herself struggling to keep up with the assignments, making her stressed all the time, and having a hard time focusing on anything other than what she had to do for homework. I then asked what their lives were socially. Whether they were shy or outgoing, whether they could talk in front of a crowd easily, or if they were nervous. All three participants agreed that while in high school they were pretty outgoing with other people, but did not do well in front of large crowds. They talked about how they would get nervous and forget information easily because of their nerves. They also complained about the times when they had to work in group projects and rely on others, rather than doing all the work themselves. I then asked what sort of awards/honors they got, and whether they felt motivated to achieve these honors when they were in high school. One participant said that she was in National Honor Society, but that was the only honors involvement in the group. None of them felt motivated enough to go to school, and missed many days throughout the 4 years.
After collecting all of this information, I asked how they have changed since joining Glee. Whether they were still afraid of large crowds, or if they had better time management or organizational skills. Every one of them had a positive to say about their academic and social lives since they had joined. Two of the three have been in Glee since the beginning of the year, and told me that they both had GPA’s of around 3.4, whereas the third participant, who has only been in Glee since the semester told me she was starting to notice a difference in her school work. All three told me that they all care about their grades, and are more motivated to work hard for what they want. One of them said that they haven’t turned in a late assignment once since joining Glee.
I then asked 3 Theatre Majors who have had a lot of theatre in the past the same sort of questions. I first asked about their work ethic and time management in high school, where all three responded that they rarely turned in late assignments, and were used to scheduling their days in order to get everything they needed to done. They then went on talking about how they would often times find themselves able to do more when they had a busier schedule within theatre, simply because they mentally felt that they did not have time for anything other than rehearsal and homework. I then asked what they were like socially. As soon as I asked this, they laughed. They told me that they never had a problem talking to people, and especially large crowds. One participant even said that he felt like talking in front of a crowd was sometimes easier than one on one. They all talked about how they also loved group projects because they all worked well with others, and found that they brought out the best in everyone within the group. Along with working well with others, they told me about how they were also very accepting of everyone, whether they were a different race, different religion, etc.
ReplyDeleteI then went on to ask about any awards or honors they received in high school, and with this, the list was endless. All three were a member of National Honor Society, along with a few other societies at their school, like National Spanish Honor Society, Thespian Troupes, and Dance Troupes. They all graduated with honors, being in the top 15% of their class, and scored above average on both SAT and ACT. When I asked if they thought theatre helped with their success thus far, they all replied without a doubt that being involved in the arts is what drove them. One participant said that the only reason he did his work and got good grades was because he knew he wanted to be an artist, and couldn’t succeed without having a good education. He wanted to go to an arts school and study, and knew that the only way he could get accepted was if he had the grades. Low and behold, he will be attending Pratt University next fall.
Discussion
After talking to these 6 students, it is quite clear that those who grew up with an arts education were simply more driven to succeed, and able to complete all kinds of work, without getting too stressed. Although we may believe that cutting the arts programs for other academic programs may help students, in the long run, that simply is not so. Children who are in the arts show more discipline, are more accepting of others, are able to take on a lot, and are able to succeed in the social world. Art studies all different countries, and all different people. If we continue to hide our children from the arts world, we will hide them from the world itself. Students of all ages can benefit from having the arts in their lives.
Rank System: 1 (less effective) to 5 (more effective)
DeleteCentral Concept: Having a background in the arts, or implementing the arts into one’s routine to lead one to be more academically motivated to succeed, reduce stress, and improve them as a student.
Paragraph 1: (Rank- 5)
It was established very clearly from the beginning of this paragraph what you studied, as well as how you selected your participants and why. This paragraph also explained the criteria well.
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This paragraph effectively explained what you did for your study and the reasons why the task was performed. You asked about grades, motivation, organizational skills, etc, because of what other scholars have concluded.
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This paragraph focuses on the communication you had with the members in Glee. The questions the participants were asked as well as their responses was recorded. These participants showed to be outgoing with others, but did not like being in front of large crowds. This paragraph also about the awards and accomplishments of those who were a part of Glee.
Paragraph 4: (Rank- 3)
This paragraph talked about how much those in Glee had changed after joining. They all agreed to be more motivated for school and that they had not even submitted a late assignment since joining.
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This paragraphed transitioned to the three participants that were in the Theatre department. A big difference between the Theatre majors and the members of Glee is that the majors had more of a background when it comes to theatre. They were asked similar questions that the members of Glee were asked. When it came to their work ethic and time management, they were organized because they were used to having to plan their days to fit everything in. All participants who were theatre majors did well in social situations. They also were very open and accepting of different races, religions, and cultures.
Paragraph 6: (Rank- 4)
This paragraph focused on the awards of those who were Theatre majors. They were all quite accomplished from having been in the National Honor Society, top 15% of their class, or doing above average on their ACT and SATs. They mutually agreed that being involved with the arts is what motivated them.
Paragraph 7: (Rank- 5)
This paragraph was the discussion of the results. It was shown that of the six participants, the ones with an arts education were more motivated to succeed and do well. The arts help enhance students overall in their performance in different aspects of their lives.
Questions:
Could a bar graph be beneficial with your results, comparing answers to different categories of questions?
How do these results contrast to people who little or no background in the arts?
Samantha DeBell
ReplyDelete14 April 2016
ENC 1102
Joseph Longhany
The main drive behind this research was my curiosity in the competitiveness of the medical field. After conducting the textual analysis, I was able to sort through the studies and categorize each one regarding the information I was able to obtain. Multiple studies found that the main culprit of the gender pay gap in the medical field was the variation in specialty choice. The male dominated specialties had a higher average income than the female dominated specialties. Looking deeper into each specialty, women still earned less than their male counterparts that were holding the same position and doing the same tasks. This was due to women’s tendency to work less hours than men. Knowing that women tend to work less hours than men, we can conclude that women see less patients, thus bringing us to the fact that women make less money than men-because a doctors salary is based on the patients they see, not an hourly wage. Coincidentally, both of these factors prove to be subjective for each individual, which negates the commonly belief that the gender pay gap is a systematic oppression against women in the work force After conducting the textual analysis, I had to find a new meaning of the information obtained. Knowing that women clocked less hours then men, I wanted to know what were the contributing factors to the hour difference, which led to a handful of more subjective factors like family status, marital status, and citizenship. It was found across the board that the majority of physicians that took time off to tend to family needs were women. When analyzing each specialty, I observed that the gender majority in each specialty is a considered factor when choosing specialties for residents in the medical field. Residents look for a group of colleagues with similar characteristics like age, personality, gender, etc. These deciding factors end up continuing the gender gap. Concluding the above research, the underlying causes of the gender pay gap in the medical field are being found piece by piece by different medical professionals across the world. The result of my research leads me to believe that the pay gap is closing in and soon enough, women will be equally represented in the medical field.
Alexandra Stavros
ReplyDeleteJoseph Longhany
ENC 1102
14 April, 2016
I conducted a textual analysis in order to look into the ethics classes that are now required in most medical schools and also the periodical training that medical professionals have to go through and how we can bring the ethics aspect into their training. By looking into the different classes that are now required for medical student’s gaps were realized in the classes and different approaches that might work better were suggested. I looked at the class description and also the class syllabus if possible and compared what was the same and also the things that set each class apart from the other. I did this because that allowed me to be able to draw conclusions as to what is standard and what classes set some schools apart. I also got to see what classes are out there now and come up with solutions I thought would be beneficial to have being taught in the schools. Similarly, I looked into the periodical medical training that is needed to keep your license and how that was addressing the ethics problem in the field. I analyzed the curriculum of the ethics training and also the ratio of the time spent on that compared to everything else. I did this because it is not only important to educate the future medical professionals but also the professionals already in the field. This is important because I identified gaps in the classes that are being required right now and hopefully those can be corrected and we can keep moving further in the medical field as far as ethics go.
Classes regarding medical ethics are becoming more and more popular in medical schools today. Looking into the different classes offered I found a wide range of topics covered from school to school. Some topics that are included in classes are about views on reproduction, death and dying, disability, and ethics regarding genetics. I saw most programs overall included the same exact topics that were to be taught. There were a few differences that I found which would go deeper into certain aspects than others. I also found of that you can get a masters or professional degree in Bioethics. Commonly religious ethics had a huge part in the overall class because that is something that can make things very controversial. It was concluded that if you get a medicine degree along with the bioethics degree you will better be suited for the job and dealing with situations. For people already actively working in the medical field it is a requirement each year to take a certain amount of credits in ethics classes offered. Unlike the medical school classes these classes are structured more on real world issues that are present at that time so that they are very relevant. The seminars or classes basically go over a certain topic or issue that was a staple recently in the field and how to deal with that and others like it. Having ethics classes as a requirement makes sure that medical professionals are being able to relate to their patients effectively.
This study has shown how important these classes are in educating the future medical professionals and also keeping the current professionals educated on our ever changing world. The overall goal of each of the courses offered are to give the future/current medical professionals ways to relate better to the patient and what they are going through. There was also a big emphasis on making the decision based on the patients’ needs and views not your own. Overall by making everyone aware of issues present and how to handle them and get the best outcome for the patient and their family the medical field will be able to continuing to provide the best care possible with their best foot forward.
I'll do your peer review
DeleteStephanie Spratte
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
14 April 2016
I conducted a survey in which I asked six people various questions on how they heard their music, where they first heard the song, and how they saw that the artist was marketing their music. My main focus if to determine how marketing has changed over the years in the music industry, whether its been impacted by social media or not, things of that nature. Themes that stood out to me included how no one mentioned commercials as a way of hearing new songs and also how social media played a huge role in the findings of new songs.
So far, there is a similarity with my data when I asked how many of the interviewees figured out how an artist was coming out with new music or a new tour. They all replied with social media to some extent. Quite a few of them realized that they follow nearly every one of their top artists on some form of social media so they were able to see that they were coming out with new music. One of the interviewees used an example and that was on Nicki Minaj’s instagram page. Nicki posted a video with a snippet of her rapping a new part to Yo Gotti’s “Down in the DM” and that’s how they became aware of the remix.
Movies were also a common way of discovering new songs that were out. I remember when I was younger, the Shrek soundtrack was legendary. This led to to ask the participants if they were aware of any of the songs from the movie, not saying it was actually from Shrek, and then asking if they associated it with the film. All of them recognized the song from a movie, but only one couldn't think of the movie they heard it from.
It seems as though times have changed with technology, everyone finds their music via some form of the internet. I asked people ranging from the age of 49 to 15 and they all used the internet. Their ways of listening to music also varied whether it was iTunes, Pandora, rhapsody, or other forms of streaming. No one had a CD or asset player as those are nearly obsolete. The ways of marketing has most definitely changed over the years and especially in the music industry and it was interesting to see how others gained knowledge of songs of how they may r associate it with a movie or TV show.
I'll do your peer review
DeleteCentral claim: Changes in marketing for the music industry
DeleteI felt like the central claim was pretty easy to follow and transitioned well throughout the paragraphs and connected well.
Paragraphs are listed in order by effectiveness from most to least:
Paragraph 1: The purpose of this paragraph was to establish what kind of research was performed and also state the central claim and a general summary statement of what was found. This paragraph was strong and was well organized especially stating what you were looking for and a quick summary of what you found.
Paragraph 2: This paragraphs purpose was to display that social media was the main way people hear about artist’s new music releases. In this paragraph I would include specific numbers of the results instead of saying “quite a few of them” to make it stronger. I think including the example about Nicki Minaj really strengthened this paragraph. I would consider merging this paragraph with paragraph 4 with a common theme of the Internet.
Paragraph 4: This paragraphs purpose was to state that everyone uses the Internet and a streaming service for music now and also w. When you say you asked people from “49 to 15” you should say “15 to 49” it goes better as a reader. Also in the sentence when you said you asked “people” from 49 to 15 you should definitely include the exact amount of people you asked. I would merge this paragraph with paragraph 2.
Paragraph 3: Stated that movies were also commonly referenced when participants were asked how they heard new music. This paragraph was kind of all over the place and hard to understand. I would try and clean this paragraph up a bit to make it easier to read. Also asking people if they were familiar with a song from a movie doesn’t really tie into the central claim of discovering new music so I would try to find a different way to get data to support that movies are a common way of finding new music.
Questions:
As a reader I want to know some specific results and percentages, have you considered including statistics?
Your most effective paragraphs included specific examples of what you asked. Have you considered including some specific examples of what a few participants responded to include in all your paragraphs?
Mitchell Colen
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
April 14, 2016
Results:
In conducting my interviews of football players that have formerly suffered concussions, I was able to discover the effects it has on the players themselves as well as the process of recovery after suffering a concussion. All of my participants I interviewed reported having at least 2 football related concussions. By interviewing these 5 football players I found that concussions can affect your daily life and also lead to Dyslexia and trouble with concentration. I also found in my results that the recovery process was not long and relied on passing a test in order to be able to be play again with most people playing within the same week they suffer a concussion.
One question I asked my participants in the interviews targeted the effects on their daily life from concussions. All 5 out of the 5 participants I interviewed said that their experience from concussions has impacted their daily life. Dyslexia and concentration were the main repercussions. Three out of the 5 participants I interviewed were diagnosed with a form of Dyslexia after they had concussions. One individual claimed that they went to the doctor and was not only diagnosed with Dyslexia but also ADHD and experienced a dramatic change in temper. Another player said that they were diagnosed with Dyslexia after suffering just their first concussion. Concentration was also a popular factor that the interviewees claimed was majorly affected afterwards. Four out of the 5 players interviewed said that they all experienced an extreme inability to concentrate after they experienced a concussion. One interviewee claimed that his inability to concentrate was so extreme that after one concussion that he had to sit out from football and school for over a month. Only 1 of the 5 players reported having more frequently occurring headaches and 2 of the 5 players reported suffering short-term memory loss and none of the players I interviewed have had concussions impact another health related injury.
Additionally, my results in regards to the recovery process after suffering a concussion was that all 5 interviewees reported that they had to pass some form of tests after they got a concussion and be cleared by a doctor in order to be eligible to play again. One individual said that he had to take numerous baseline tests to test his ability to focus in order to play again. The players I interviewed reported some different recovery times after suffering their concussions. Four out of the 5 players interviewed reported playing football within the same week they suffered one of their concussions and only 2 out of the 5 players interviewed reported that they had to sit out for longer than 3 weeks after one of their concussions. One particular individual I interviewed suffered 4 football related concussions and played within the same week with his first 3 concussions but sat out for over a month after his 4th concussion. When asked what helped them recover after a concussion, all 5 of the players claimed that they would sit or lay down in a dark room because of the short-term effects of sensitivity to light. Two of the 5 participants said that sleeping also additionally helped them recover and made them feel better overall.
Discussion:
After conducting my interviews with 5 former football players that have suffered multiple concussions I was able to discover the impact of concussions on a players life. It is clear from these personal interviews that concussions heavily impact a player’s life and could lead to more damaging consequences. All of the players that were interviewed were affected daily due to prior concussions and I have found that concussions can lead to some additional damaging consequences including but not limited to dyslexia and an inability to concentrate. Through the interviews I conducted I am able to support the claims of scholars that concussions do in fact negatively impact a players life and can further damage an individual down the road.
Central Claim: The effects that come from concussions and how those concussions affect the daily lives of the football players even after they are cleared to play football again.
DeleteCould a graph or table be beneficial to your results section?
If the reader knows nothing about concussions will they understand the effects like dyslexia without you explaining them?
The two paragraphs discussing your results are really effective at showing exactly what you were trying to get out of your interviews and give a good visual. The only thing I would improve would be to explain things a little more because your reader might not know anything about your topic. I would also consider putting in a graph or table to show your questionnaire results. Overall good paper!
Paragraph 1: This paragraph discussed how they conducted the study and insight into some of the results. This paragraph was effective in establishing context but I do think it could be a little more detailed. Maybe add in what questions you asked so that the reader can get a better idea of the criteria you used.
Paragraph 2: This paragraph talked about the questions that the researcher asked the participants and what the results were from the questions. This paragraph was effective because it explains the effects that may be caused from concussions. I do think that you could go into what dyslexia and ADHD are in case the reader does not.
Paragraph 3: This paragraph discussed the recovery process that each interview participant went through and if it was effective. I think this paragraph was very effective because you went through step by step of the questions and what the results were. Good job at making connections between the questions and results.
Paragraph 4: Concluded that concussions do negatively impact a football player’s life and that his findings supported those of scholars.
Julie Phan
ReplyDeleteProfessor Joseph Longhany
ENC 1102
14 April 2016
Results and Discussion
The survey was executed with the intent to find out the society’s general opinion about hip hop culture and whether they believed if rap had either a positive or negative influence on society, mainly focusing on young adults. The survey started out with general questions such as, “What is your age range?” and, “How often to you listen to hip hop/rap music?” These types of questions gave me a general idea of the age range of the audience that was taking my survey. The majority audience, 84.6%, that took this survey are between the ages 17-21. The second question gave me an idea of how frequent the subject listens to hip hop music, which I will use in the end to compare the answers of those who listens to this genre regularly and how their answer differs from another subject who may not listen to this genre as frequently. The average subject listens hip hop/rap music from 3-6 days out of the week and between those hours, each time they listen to hip hop/rap, it is played in the duration of about 3-10 hours. Question five asks, “Are you familiar with hip-hop/rap culture and music?” and 61.5% of the audience members answered yes.
The fourth question, “Do you feel hip-hop/rap has a .... influence on people?” the answer choices given were, “Positive, negative, minimal, and none,” And according to the survey 38.5% answered positive, 15.5% negative, 38.5% minimal, and 7.7% said none. So based on these results, the majority think that the hip hop culture either have a positive effect or minimal effect on those to are immersed in the culture.
Question nine asks for what the audience believes hip hop has a negative effect on while question ten asks for the positive effects. After analyzing the results, it has been concluded that the majority think that hip hop has a negative effect on the “perception of women” and “drugs & alcoholism”. To discuss, that mean that the majority of the audience think that hip hop culture portrays women in a negative way, which in other studies done by different researcher support the fact that the rap culture tends to influences society to objectify women and perceive them more as objects (trophies, toys, etc.) instead of seeing them as equivalent, respectable, human beings. Many of the subjects thinks hip hop depicts drugs and alcoholism very highly. So one may conclude that the rap culture also contributes to the influence of substance abuse due to the very harsh and graphic nature of hip hop music videos and the lyrics within the songs. Meanwhile, when asked about the positive affects of hip hop, the common answers were: dress, behavior, and values. So according to the results, the interviewees believe that hip hop has highly influenced the fashion industry, performance, and has taught the subjects to value their personal morals.
When asked, “Do you feel hip-hop/rap promotes rebellion, prostitution & sex among young girls?” majority of the answers were “yes.” And when asked, “Do you feel hip-hop/rap promotes rebellion & sex among young boys?” The majority also said “yes.” So one can conclude that rap plays a major role in the influence and pressure among young adults. When asked other questions about what hip hop culture promotes the majority of the answers were: drug usage, alcoholism, and objectification of women.
Overall, after conducting the survey, I believe that the hip hop/rap culture have both positive and negative effects of the youth today. For example, a negative effect would be the normalism of drugs and promotion of sexual intercourse. But there are also positive outcomes of this culture such as the new styles and boom of the fashion industry. Hip hop is a constantly evolving culture so although there are many negatives consequences of this culture, it counteracts with the positive influences that it brings.
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ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
4/20/16
At the onset of my research I had a general thesis as to how the study group would respond based on other similar percentages recorded from the CDC that studied a similar case nationally. The CDC conducted research on a national level addressing all adult smokers in 2014. Because my search was primarily based on race and ethnicity among university educated students I predicted from only a 7.9% of users out of the 100 that were educated at the undergraduate level that the results would prove to be more of the ‘con’ extreme for all participants but variation would be present between individuals cultural backgrounds.
Through the three main introductory questions I found that of the 6 different race and ethnicity categories and the individuals that catorgorized themselves into these subsections, only 22% of non-hispanic Whites, 15% of Asians, 36% of Blacks, 20% of Hispanics, 17% of american indians/alaskan natives, and 25% of individuals with multiple races revealed that they currently or have used tobacco products regularly in their lifetimes. This data correlates lower percentage of users in all categories with the exception of the blacks and hispanics that completed the survey. The remaining populations of individuals reported no use at all. It’s also important to realize for braoder knowledge that less than 30% of the entire group of 100 individuals surveyed were or had been tobacco users and in addition, less than 10% of the group fell into the ‘moderate’ category. This was very beneficial to my search because it allowed a majority of individuals to give detailed information as to why they felt so extremely for or against cigarettes.
After separating the crowd of all participants into two groups of users and non-users I could further synthesize the answers they gave as to why they were or were not active in tobacco. The branching questions from their specific answers to the main three were beneficial to explaining how their personal culture has shaped their views and if the marketing techniques of the industry even had a chance in enticing young adults that are university educated to initiate, smoke more frequently or relapse.
Paragraph 1) An brief introduction into information previously gathered by the CDC that will be used for comparison. This paragraph could go a little more in depth to what exactly was studied, needs more evidence.
ReplyDeleteParagraph 2) The main results paragraph discussing different ethnicities and if they were for or against cigarettes. The percentages of each race are helpful and helps show which ethnicities support tobacco usage. Could use a little more evidence.
Paragraph 3) Conclusion paragraph that synthesizes the results. Could use a little more here on what exactly encourages smoking and why.
The main theme of this section is discussing which races accept smoking and if being educated on smoking changes one opinion on usage.
Questions:
What is the CDC, and what was their similar case study?
How was this data gathered?
Patrick Curtis
ReplyDeleteProfessor Longhany
ENC 1102
21 April 2016
The results of my survey and response from my interviews shoes that the average every day person still thinks that the death penalty should remain. I find this particarly surprising because from my studies I have found that many of the scholars out there belive that there is a change in opinion going on and say that more and more people think that the death penalty should be abolished.
I asked several questions mainly to make sure that there was as little bias as possible. For example I asked everyone which political party they associate themselves with because Republicans tend to support the death penalty and democrats do not. I also asked whether what religion my participants are affiliated with because of the same reason as the last question. The purpose of these questions was to get a better feel of how my participants may answer before I got to the more opinionated questions. I then asked my participants questions to determine their knowledge of the death penalty to make sure that they weren’t as informed on this subject as scholars. For example I asked them questions like do you know that there is a death penalty case taking place in Florida right now? And Did you know that the death penalty costs more than a life sentence? Finally I asked the real questions like what do you think about the death penalty? Should it be abolished or stay?
In the end about 80% of my participants believed that the death penalty should remain. My participants consisted of 30 students from UCF and half were male and half were female. I found these results to be astounding because most if not a lot of scholars truly believe that many Americans are against or moving against the death penalty.
1) The results of my survey and response from my interviews shoes that the average every day person still thinks that the death penalty should remain. I find this particarly surprising because from my studies I have found that many of the scholars out there belive that there is a change in opinion going on and say that more and more people think that the death penalty should be abolished.
Delete*Just fix a few typos, “shoes” to “shows”, “particarly” to “particularly”, and “belive” to “believe”.
-This paragraph was short and to the point. I like that you didn’t make it too wordy. You communicated what your topic was and how it was relevant. The only thing I’d change is the wording, try to make it flow more properly as if it was a part of a conversation.
-The main theme of this paragraph was introducing your topic and proposing why it’s relevant, which is important for all introductions to all papers.
2) I asked several questions mainly to make sure that there was as little bias as possible. For example I asked everyone which political party they associate themselves with, because Republicans tend to support the death penalty and democrats do not. I also asked what religion my participants are affiliated with because of the same reason as the last question. The purpose of these questions was to get a better feel of how my participants may answer before I got to the more opinionated questions. I then asked my participants questions to determine their knowledge of the death penalty to make sure that they weren’t as informed on this subject as scholars. For example I asked them questions like do you know that there is a death penalty case taking place in Florida right now? And did you know that the death penalty costs more than a life sentence? Finally I asked the real questions like what do you think about the death penalty? Should it be abolished or stay?
-I like that you explained your reasoning behind each question asked, but I think it’s starting to sound more like a methodology section because it’s really going into lengths with purely your methods. To avoid this I think you should conclude each question that you asked with the kind of results you found from the questions. Like “I asked for what their religion was, and ended up finding that______.”
-This paragraph was the most effective out of the three because as I reader, I learned the most about what your project was on and I was given a good idea of what you’re doing. I think once you find a way to get the other two paragraphs to flow more continuously, this will be a great results/discussion section.
-The main point in this paragraph was how you did your research and why you did it, which is good because you’re showing that you have an understanding of what exactly that you are doing.
3) In the end about 80% of my participants believed that the death penalty should remain. My participants consisted of 30 students from UCF and half were male and half were female. I found these results to be astounding because most if not a lot of scholars truly believe that many Americans are against or moving against the death penalty.
-I think that your discussion should be longer. It’s good that you included your results, but now it when you should be adding to the conversation and sharing how you analyzed your data.
-I saw the main point of this paragraph to serve as a conclusion but it left me hanging. I’d like to hear more of what you have to say and how you’re going to
Peer Review of Julie Phan's
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1. Paragraph one talked about the intent of the methods and results of questions 1, 2, and 3 in terms of percentages for the number of times each answer was chosen. The paragraph started well by giving the intent of the previous section (methods) and allowed an easy transition into the results section. After stating the first two questions, she did a good job of explaining why they were generalized, to start simple and get some background knowledge. *****
2. Paragraph two summed up the results to question 4 of her survey and which answers had the greatest percentages. The results were basically stated in this and the answers with the most responses were acknowledged. *
3. Paragraph three recited questions 9 and ten, and then went on to explain what was thought to be negatively represented by hip hop, and what was positively represented, and what that means in our culture. She clearly identified what factors the survey’s audience felt were the most influential, both negatively and positively. She then went on to explain how these answers could be influencing society itself. ****
4. Paragraph four showed how influential people felt hip hop is in regards to their survey responses on this question, and those results were summarized and explained what that means in today’s society. The paragraph restated certain questions that were asked and which responses were chosen the most **
5. The last paragraph summed up what the results of the survey meant and what the author’s thoughts are on the topic. She went on to claim what she felt after looking at the results of each question as a whole, and interpreted what influenced society and how. Her conclusion on the topic was very clear and straightforward. ***
Questions
1. What does it mean for society if hip-hop is both positive and negative?
2. How does hip hop influence people differently and how is it different based on the artist’s morlas?